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The Music Demon

by ~KamikazeRae

Have you been possessed
by the
rapping,
tapping,
nodding
Music Demon?

It lurks around
like an infectious disease.
Spreading
          it's groove.
Spreading
          it's beat.

It moves. It dances.
Like,
it's walking on a
moving dance floor.
Like,
no one's gonna stop it.
          no one ever would...

Because the
rhythm. The
groove.
It has captured us.
          Our mind
          Our soul
We are slaves!
          Let it take
          you over...

There's no escape!
          Might as well
          not be...

Simply surrender
and you will be free.
Music
        will heal.
Music
        will provoke.
Music
        will be your oxygen!

The Music Demon:
It has you.
It owns you.

Let it's music
take you.

Beat after beat.
Rhythm after rhythm.

Have you been possessed yet?
:iconkamikazerae:
I was inspired by Shaun's (Darkshaunz [link]) MS Paint piece, "Music Demon" and thought I'd write a poem about it. My work is never proof-read, so excuse me if I made any mistakes (Grammatical, etc.).

The description that he made of that deviation sort of got me started. "Have you been possessed?"
Hope you enjoy it.

>>>>>>>EDITED<<<<<<<
I've edited the poem just a bit. Thanks to Luke, o' great poet! So just to let you know, a quote from Lok.

Just a few notes:

Let it take
over you...

should probably be:

Let it take
you over...

and:

Let it's music
take over you.

should become:

Let its music
take you.
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~Darkshaunz Aug 7, 2004
Excellent work, Rae. Good to see you getting the hang of poetry. Glad you were inspired by my piece of art, I hope that my future works have the same effect. But I am taking a break from art and concentrating on my year 12 mock exams right now. Until then, peace.

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- DS.
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~KamikazeRae Aug 7, 2004
Thanks for the comment Shaun. Good luck for your year 12 mock exams.

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~Slue Aug 6, 2004
Rae i really do like your poetry! You have a great style that i love. Top stuff, nice and simple with a fantastic beat. I really have to try to do some simplified poetry some time with just a fun beat like you have :)

Just a few notes:

Let it take
over you...

should probably be:

Let it take
you over...

and:

Let it's music
take over you.

should become:

Let its music
take you.

^___^

--
Earth will be a better place when we live on the moon.
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~KamikazeRae Aug 6, 2004
Luke! Thanks for the comment and advise. I should correct it. Thanks so much for the notes.

My poetry doesn't look like it's got a particular style. Simple, yeah, I guess so. I got a few placement ideas from you [Your poetry is great!]. Thanks again! :D

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